[請教]英文作文訂正~~~ a job interview

[請教]英文作文訂正~~~ a job interview

台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 4:51 pm

Last Saturday, I went for a job interview at a restaurant near my home. Sitting down in the manager’s office, I felt nervous. This was the first time I had tried to work. I didn’t know how to proceed. After the manager had asked me a few questions, I began to relax. She was friendly and thus I stated to feel more confident. Then she continued to ask:


“Have you ever had any previous work experiences in restaurant? “ the manager asked.

“I haven’t had any work experiences before” I answered nervously. “But I will try my best to do well on the job; in addition, I can get along with people easily”

“Why do you want to come here to work?” she continued asked

“I not only can have more social experiences than others but know many people who are from different background as well.” I answered confidently “Now my major in school is also about the things of restaurants so it makes me have more interests in doing the job.”

“I see. Then your hourly pay is $ 95 and when would you like to start your work?” she asked


“Do you mean I am hired? I can start my work next Monday.” I answered happily.

“Yes, you have been hired and remember to work next Monday” she answered

At that time, I was so excited to hear the news and I thought I would do the job very well.


請大家幫我改一下 英文作文,或者給我一些意見 謝謝你們的幫忙喔!!
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Re: [請教]英文作文訂正~~~ a job interview

台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 4:51 pm

Last Saturday, I went for a job interview at a restaurant near my home. Sitting down in the manager’s office, I felt nervous. This was the first time I had tried to work. I didn’t know how to proceed. After the manager had asked me a few questions, I began to relax. She was friendly and thus I started to feel more confident. Then she continued to ask:

“Have you ever had any previous work experiences in restaurant? “ the manager asked.

“I haven’t had any work experiences before,(逗號)” I answered nervously. “But I will try my best to do well on the job; in addition, I can get along with people easily”

“Why do you want to come here to work?” she continued asked -> to ask.

“I not only can have more social experiences than others but know many people who are from different background as well .(*1)” I answered confidently. “ Now My major in school is also about the things of restaurants so it makes me have more interests in doing the job.(*2)”

“I see. Then your hourly pay is $(US dollars?) 95 and when would you like to start your work ?” she asked

“Do you mean I am hired? I can start my work next Monday.(或是用逗號)” I answered happily.

“Yes, you have been hired and remember to come to work next Monday,(逗號)” she answered

At that time, I was so excited to hear the news and I thought->knew I would do the job very well.

(*1)你還未上班,尚未認識那些人....
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"Because I'll have/gain more social experience by working here, and I'll get to know people from different backgrounds as well,"
(*2)
--> My major is also about restaurants, which is the reason I prefer this job over others. --> My major is also about restaurants and it's the reason I prefer this job over others. --> My major is also about restaurants so it makes sense that I work here. --> My major is also about restaurants so it helps too.
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