[請教]英文自傳; blackangel

[請教]英文自傳; blackangel

台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 3:11 am

我寫了一篇簡短的英文自傳
希望各位大大可以幫忙看一下是否有需要修改的地方?
謝謝各位!!

I am very interested in the position on your company's webside, and I believe I have the skills required by this position. It’s my honors to introduce myself.
I was born in Kaohsiung city in 1979. I grew up in a family with two parents and an older sister. My parents were retired and my sister works in convenience store.
I am studying in National Kaohsiung Hospitality College and will graduate in this June. My major is travel management. It’s my honors to be a vice-president of travel management department club in passed year. That’s a very special’s experience to me. I have learned about how to make a group work smoothly and how to speck in front of people without fear and so on. That’s a hard work but really worthful and valuable.
I have four years work experience in travel agency. I was a sales and operator. I have learned a lot such as how to communicate with customer and how to cooperate with other company and so on.
I am easy going, patient and responsible person, I consider myself to being a fast leaner with my existing skills, I believe I can make immediate contributions to your company.
Thanks for your patient of this resume, wish you have a nice day.
Best Regards,.
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Re: [請教]英文自傳; blackangel

台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 3:11 am

以下是我提供的修改稿,供參考I am very interested in the position on your company's webside, and I believe I am adequate for this position. It's my honorto introduce myself.
I was born in Kaohsiung city in 1979. I grew up in a family with my parents and an elder sister. My parents retired and my sister is working in a store.
I am studying in National Kaohsiung Hospitality College and will graduate this June. My major is tourism management. I was honored to be the vice-president of the club in our department for the past few years. That was a very special experience for me. I have learned how to manage teamwork , how to speak in public and so on. That was a tough but really worthful work.
I have four years' working experience in the sales department of a travel agency which has taught me how to communicate with customers,how to cooperate with other companies and so on.
I am easygoing, patient and reliable. I am sure I can make contribution to your company.
Thanks for your patience , and I'm looking forward to your response asap.
Best Regards.

Donna
線上 英文教學
www.onebyone-online.com
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Re: [請教]英文自傳; blackangel

台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 3:11 am

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Re: [請教]英文自傳; blackangel

台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 3:11 am

謝謝Donnal23大大的修改,感恩啦!
謝謝dyjang大大,我會再注意的!
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