Thank you again, Glotynn and Djyang!
Honestly speaking, I am inspired a lot because of both of your helping me to write better with more suitable words and expression and because of your detailed explanations referring to the parts that I didn't understand quite well.
This time, besides the revision that you have suggested me, I added a little more details to my original writing to make it more like a descriptive story. Again, I am looking forward to your corrections and suggestions.
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Topic: "No swimming!" 加寫細節篇
(1) Last Sunday, it was unbearably hot and humid even though I had all of the windows in my room open and had a big fan on. The stuffy room made me so uncomfortable that I thought of going swimming to cool down myself. Instead of going to a swimming pool, finally I decided to drive to the countryside to swim in a river, where has the breathtaking scenery and the fresh air. Moreover, I thought it would be a lot more refreshing and less crowded there, compared with the indoor swimming pool, which I went to quite often on the weekend.
(2) As soon as I got the destination, the beautiful view of the river caught my eye. Because of my great excitement, I couldn't wait to immerse myself in the cool, wavy water, and then I jumped into the river without even doing any warm-up exercise. At that moment, I was setting free like a carefree bird with the nature embracing me. While I was enjoying swimming, both of my legs felt so sore that I was having a hard time moving them freely. Getting extremely nervous and scared, I tried to shout out “Help! Help!” as loud as I could, hoping I would be rescued.
(3) Thankfully, a man who was nearby heard my cries. He bravely jumped into the river without any hesitations, so I was saved from drowning. Nevertheless, after pulling me out of the water, he was kind of angry with me.“Before you swim, didn't you notice the‘No Swimming!’sign near the river?”said the man with his serious voice and face. I could tell that he was blaming me for my carelessness. I almost shed tears while facing him, but I hid them running down my face and tried to be as calm as I could.“Thank you so much for getting me out of this dangerous situation,”I replied sincerely. At last, my words melt his anger away, and he became more friendly and made sure I was fine before he left.
(4) I felt that I was so lucky to meet such a kind man to save me even though I was just a stranger for him. He could have left me alone, but he didn't. My entire mind was filled with the gratefulness toward him while I was driving home. That man taught me a good lesson, that is, before we go swimming in an unfamiliar place, we should be aware of our surroundings to make sure it is safe to swim. Also, it is better for us not to go swimming alone in case something emergent happening but no one is there to help us. Besides, we should do some warm-up exercise in advance so that we can prevent our bodies from getting hurt.