[請教]我的論文英文摘要Thesis Abstract(各位覺得不順、奇怪的)

[請教]我的論文英文摘要Thesis Abstract(各位覺得不順、奇怪的)

台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 4:51 pm

很久沒寫 英文作文了,但論文需要一篇英文摘要,我請朋友看,但因為我和他都是台灣人,很容易有中文邏輯式的英文。想請比較瞭解English Native Usage的人,幫忙看看,把覺得怪怪的、不順的地方標出來即可(當然如果可以提供修改意見,我會非常非常感激),繼續修改中,過幾天就要印了,懇請大家幫忙。

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Thesis title: Disscussing the local sustainability from the viewpoint of the growing guesthouse industry in Penghu

Abstrct:

Penghu County is composed by islands, which are often environmentally vulnerable, facing problems of resource supply and management and having weak social structure. Tourism dominates the economy of Penghu for years. However, most residents were hardly benefited, people have worried about the imbalance of development in Penghu, and it seems hard to make things better. In consequence, promoting sustainability issues is substantial.

In recent years, the guesthouse industry in Penghu is booming which brings some favorable influences. For the local, more economic activities are created and tighter networks are formed. The appearing of small enterprises like guesthouses makes people engaging in tourism easier. Therefore, middle-aged people can change career from traditional industry and the youth have more chance to comeback and succeed in Penghu. For sure, tourists’ travel experiences are considerably improved since that the guesthouse industry provides a wide selection of accommodation and attractions. Unexpectedly, the guesthouse industry opens up new markets such as small group tours and off-season markets.

Though some guesthouses’ operations contribute to the local sustainability, individual actions are not influential enough. Toward sustainable development, the participation of local authorities, groups, communities, and private sectors is essential. The local authority should play the key role because of its legitimacy and abundance of administrative resources. Environmental, commercial and other groups can achieve more when taking sustainable development seriously. The communities’ awareness of sustainability can be sensitized by modeling and guiding. The private sectors should promote more sustainable approaches and the guesthouse associate can achieve much more than individuals.

Because many guesthouses in Penghu are hosted by residents with various ideas and local concerns, the appearing of them brings not only economic interests but also the recognition of environmental, social and cultural value. However, the positive trend should be enhanced by visionary organizations, strong leading authorities, and more participating people. At first, open meetings should be hold to let opinions be heard. Promoting the local sustainability is an ongoing progress. The growing guesthouse industry may provide a pleasant viewpoint, but much more needs to be done toward the local sustainability.
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Re: [請教]我的論文英文摘要Thesis Abstract(各位覺得不順、奇怪的)

台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 4:51 pm

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台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 4:51 pm

"ok" say i ...

it seems a good idea to go to penghu sometimes...the guesthouse industry seems to be thriving there now, maybe it's also a good idea to start a career.....oops,...still some problems ? eh..maybe when everything's done, we'll talk about it.

from my side..this thesis abstrct is well done, kinda enoying reading it.

but, grammar is never my stuff...
sorry, can't help...

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Re: [請教]我的論文英文摘要Thesis Abstract(各位覺得不順、奇怪的)

台灣英語網1.0 » 週五 8月 21, 2015 4:51 pm

Penghu County is composed (of) islands, which are often environmentally vulnerable, facing problems of resource supply (and --> , ??) management (,) and having weak social structure. Tourism (has dominated) the economy of Penghu for years(; however), most residents were hardly benefited from it. (People have been worrying) about the imbalance of development in Penghu, and it seems hard to make things better(; hence(*1)) promoting sustainability issues is substantial.

(*1)
in consequence = as a result --> As a result (because of those issues), things are getting worse.

hence = for this reason --> For this reason, we need to do something to improve the situation.



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In recent years, the guesthouse industry in Penghu is booming(, <-- this comma is required) which brings some favorable influences.(*1) For the local, more economic activities are created and tighter networks are formed. The appearing of small enterprises like guesthouses makes people engaging in tourism easier. Therefore, middle-aged people can change career from traditional industry and the youth have more chance to comeback(??) and succeed in Penghu (when they grow up??). For sure, tourists’ travel experiences are considerably improved since(?? *2) that the guesthouse industry provides a wide selection of accommodation and attractions. Unexpectedly, the guesthouse industry opens up new markets such as small group tours and off-season markets.

(*1) This sentence kind of contradicts what is expressed in previous paragraph. I have the impression that the guesthouse industry also contributes to the imbalance of development in Penghu. Or, the guesthouse helps to "balance" the development?
(*2) since --> it means "because" or "from that point on" ?
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